Great Melody!
I loved the melody! One Suggestion.
I would rather put a bass in the beginning rather than at da beginning of the melody. Da Drums are really not in line together. Maybe a crash in da beginning. Then the bass would comes. And After a while the whole melody would come in.
Maybe the full Dark Time Song, (if you ever get in to it) put a chrash at the end.
I still liked it!
Dj-Bill